Sleeping Valor

Definitely better. ^_^ Though make sure it doesn't happen too fast. At first she'd be confused and fascinated, trying to find about about the woman who wrote the poem without ...

^_^ Good to hear. You'll have to work at it, but I think you can make something really great with this idea. Good luck. :wink:

It sounds pretty good, just a few things. If she has been raised racist, then why doe she find the other people's comments are bad? If her family is racist ...

I don't have any suggestions, just some questions that you should know the answer to and make sure the readers know the answer to as well: 1) Why does life ...

:smt046 This was hilarious! And I can happily say that my answer was no to all of these questions. ^_^ This is very useful and insanely entertaining. Thanks for sharing! ...

Personally, that last idea with the new student seems very...anime-ish to me. I've seen a lot of animes where new characters from other worlds infiltrate by becoming students. However, that ...

I'll be at your place tomorrow! :lol: This is a good idea. I should do something like this too. Set myself a goal of how much to write per week ...

The question is not: what do we think of her switching sides? The question is: what does she think of switching sides? Thinking about it from the character's perspective, this ...

The wanting to write randomly, I get all the time. I think I shall call it 'writer's itch'. Here's some things I do to get ideas! 1) Look at random ...

I can help! :D Or at least I think I can. I've been helping someone else improve their writing and they seem to have appreciated it so maybe I can ...

Hmmmm. Ok, having read Holly Black's book Tithe, your first idea seems used to me (in the book the girl is a changeling and the only reason she doesn't know ...

Well if you can't do that, then I'd say use 'sexual favors'. Because in the end, that's what's in the story, right? How's it going to scare them off any ...

I haven't read it (though I think I saw it on this site, is it still up?), but have you considered just saying 'favors'?

As was mentioned above, you do have a couple cliche elements, but you combine them into something original and that's really what's important because these days almost everything has been ...

Definitely not cliched. It sounds pretty original. ^_^ Best of luck.